Special:Badtitle/NS90:Milestones-Nomination talk:Birthplace of the Bar Code, 1948/Suggested changes to citation from Lyle Feisel

I think the citation needs some work here is the old first sentence and my suggestion for a change:

Original:

In an attempt to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland conceived a solution in 1948 at the Drexel Institute of Technology which later became the ubiquitous Barcode.

My suggestion:

In an effort to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland of the Drexel Institute of Technology developed a system that later became the ubiquitous barcode.