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Suggested changes to citation from Lyle Feisel

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I think the citation needs some work here is the old first sentence and my suggestion for a change:


Original:


In an attempt to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland conceived a solution in 1948 at the Drexel Institute of Technology which later became the ubiquitous Barcode.


My suggestion:


In an effort to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland of the Drexel Institute of Technology developed a system that later became the ubiquitous barcode.

    Administrator416:28, 18 August 2011
     

    I believe that Lyle's wording tightens up the language without changing meaning. How do others feel?

      140.98.210.24314:23, 2 September 2011
       

      I prefer Lyle's wording. The original citation also has a redundant "of" which should be cleaned up. - Lise

        Lisetiffner19:05, 2 September 2011