Suggested changes to citation from Lyle Feisel
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Your IP address will be recorded in this page's edit history.I think the citation needs some work here is the old first sentence and my suggestion for a change:
Original:
In an attempt to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland conceived a solution in 1948 at the Drexel Institute of Technology which later became the ubiquitous Barcode.
My suggestion:
In an effort to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland of the Drexel Institute of Technology developed a system that later became the ubiquitous barcode.
I believe that Lyle's wording tightens up the language without changing meaning. How do others feel?
I prefer Lyle's wording. The original citation also has a redundant "of" which should be cleaned up. - Lise
I agree with Lyle's suggestion, although I would avoid using such "magnification" words as "ubiquituous", "quintessential", or "multi-billion" in the original citation. Those words don't contibute to the historical value of the Milestone and might sound somewhat pretentious. My suggestion, then, on Lyle's suggestion would be:
In an effort to automate the reading of product information in a local grocery store, Bernard Silver and Norman Joseph Woodland of the Drexel Institute of Technology developed a solution that later became the Barcode Identification System. Patented in 1952, the Barcode has become a key technology for product identification and inventory control in present Industry and daily life.
I agree the Bar Code Milestone and prefer the wording by Lyle Feisel.
