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I support the milestone for Apple II, but I have a few suggested edits. I am concerned about the claim of "first" when others existed. I also tried to tighten the wording towards a more directed assertion:

CURRENT: The Apple II spurred software and hardware suppliers to help create the worldwide personal computing industry. It was the first low-cost computer to offer quick start-up, pre-addressed standard expansion slots, processor RAM-based bit-mapped NTSC color graphics and random access storage in a handsome compact package. It had an economy of design with a BASIC interpreter and assembler in ROM as well as gaming and graphics features.

SUGGESTED: The Apple II helped create the worldwide personal computing industry. It was one of the first low-cost computers to offer quick start-up, pre-addressed standard expansion slots, processor RAM-based bit-mapped NTSC color graphics and random access storage in a handsome compact package for home or business use. Its economy of design incorporated a BASIC interpreter and assembler as well as new gaming and graphics features. --Dave Bart

Jbart6422:39, 7 March 2014